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Date: 2011-01-14 03:24 am (UTC)
Goodness Jason is both menacing and seductive! No wonder poor Tim is drawn in. Especially when Jason is using his dangerous allure to relay an important message. He's playing on all of Tim's characteristics: his desires, his sense of right and wrong, and his dedication to the Mission.

This part was very well constructed. I like that we got more insight into Tim's new life, and that he's keeping up relationships with his friends. Considering how hard he's been working, as evident at the beginning of this chapter, I'm glad he's finding even half-available outlets through civilians like Bernard.

You did a terrific job conveying Jason's complexities. And Tim's reaction to them. I really like how you're fleshing out this aspect of this universe. The characters stay very true to the originals, while having their own aspects as well.

I can't wait to see the fallout of this new drug (and villain, by the sounds of it), as well as Tim's interaction with Jason! Again, great job!!
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